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writerscraft: freewrite mar12 by ~Satah:iconSatah:

Categories Literature > Prose > Non-Fiction > General Non-Fiction


Right now, I live in the feeling of the floor under my shoe and my toe against the desk. My binder is touching my arm gently. The denim of my jeans is soft and comfortable against my warm hand. Hundreds of strands of hair brush against my skin and my tongue prods gently at my aching teeth. Right now, I live in the humming of fluorescent lights and the scratching of pens. I am a traveller, but in the end-- home is with her, in the feeling of safety and a lap to rest my head on; in the smell of roses, mint gum, and shampoo. It's in the warmth of arms around me and the comfort of body heat radiating through my sweater. It's strands of blonde hair on pillows, ashes on sidewalks, shoes in the front hall, a jacket on my computer chair, and green eyes behind glasses.
©2009 ~Satah
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Author's Comments

Prompt: Write about home, without describing a place.
Time given: Ten minutes?

i forgot to upload this one on the actual day, but i still sort of like it, so... here it is! it's very short! i don't know why it's so very short!

the first half is referring to living in the moment... yeah? anyone catch that? hopefully?

i read this out in class, with a disclaimer as to its cheesiness.

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~the7eventhrider Mar 25, 2009, 3:59:23 PM
I like it. The imagery is emotive without being overly cliche, and the word choice is fantastic. There might be a few spelling errors (lap instead of hap?) or I might be missing something. The flow is beauituflly easy to follow. Overall, it gets the message across and makes me happy for you, though we haven't met. That's what poetry is all about though, right? :heart: Well, well done.

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. the happiest sappiests .
xDante and the7eventhrider

+ for my purpose holds
To sail beyond the sunset, and the baths
Of all the western stars, until I die.
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*KageNoKarasu Mar 25, 2009, 4:02:35 PM
Yeah, I get it: first the now and then where you'd rather be, because home is so much warmer, softer, and more welcoming... or something like that. :)

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Hides in the corners of her mind, where she plays contently.
She leaves this nightmare far behind, she escapes inside her dreams.
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~talk2hand Mar 25, 2009, 4:18:10 PM
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAW

'nuff said.
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~Satah Mar 25, 2009, 4:21:30 PM
thank youu! i try to avoid clichés in my romanticy stuff, but it can be very difficult.

oh, whoops! fixing that up.

thank you! (: <3

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i wish that the library were open all night, because i like being there.
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~Satah Mar 25, 2009, 4:21:39 PM
yeah. (:

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i wish that the library were open all night, because i like being there.
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~Satah Mar 25, 2009, 4:21:47 PM
pssshhttt <3

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i wish that the library were open all night, because i like being there.
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~the7eventhrider Mar 26, 2009, 8:08:50 AM
They don't call them cliches for nothing! Unfortunately, they're mostly true and applicable to everything. XD And you are most welcome.

--
. the happiest sappiests .
xDante and the7eventhrider

+ for my purpose holds
To sail beyond the sunset, and the baths
Of all the western stars, until I die.
:iconehb:
=EHB Mar 28, 2009, 3:31:54 AM
Ah is this the home you spoke of? :)
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~Satah Mar 28, 2009, 1:30:01 PM
yeah! :D i forgot i'd mentioned it.

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i wish that the library were open all night, because i like being there.
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