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sacrifice by ~Satah:iconSatah:

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  i want to get rid of
   some extra pieces of my body

        because i don't need them, but
        other people do:

      i have bone marrow and blood,
       slices of liver, a kidney,
        the beginnings of babies;
      i'd have long hair if i weren't so
                                  impulsive.

               i have a donor card with all boxes checked off
               and a habit for reckless abandon,

            i have outstretched hands.
            i have listening ears and kind words.

         i've been called a saint before
         and my heart started to strain its chains,
            thumpa thumpa,

            fearing for the day that everyone realizes i am
             less martyr, more
                  mea culpa,
            and my thinly-veiled, scrambling attempt to balance my karma is
             less angelic, more
                  apology.
©2009 ~Satah
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Author's Comments

number fifty-seven for my hundred themes challenge

"to dispose of, regardless of profit" is the definition we're working with here. soo that's not quite accurate, but that's alright.

sometimes i hope that reincarnation grades on a curve.

ps: don't tell anyone that i'm not actually a good person, i'm just a really good liar. it'll be our little secret, okay?

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=W-Uno Mar 26, 2009, 1:57:33 AM
've been called a saint before
and my heart started to strain its chains,
thumpa thumpa,

I love that stanza so much it makes me smile, and you know how I hate doing that. Bad Satah.

The ending is awesome too.

I think you do a pretty good job at karma balancing, anyway, and I judge by the person somebody is now, so I still think you be a good one.

I like how it started all seven-pounds and that section ended with the more simple, human things you have to offer.

It's good. And yay.

--
Go then - there are other worlds than these.
:iconsatah:
~Satah Mar 26, 2009, 2:02:26 AM
thuthuthu. i am the most evil person. :D

ehh i'm alright.

thank youu (:

--
i wish that the library were open all night, because i like being there.
:iconw-uno:
=W-Uno Mar 26, 2009, 2:03:42 AM
You are. I also wish you would stop torturing small animals.

--
Go then - there are other worlds than these.
:iconsatah:
~Satah Mar 26, 2009, 2:07:14 AM
never!

-pours salt on snails, poisons pigeons, and kicks puppies-

--
i wish that the library were open all night, because i like being there.
:iconthe7eventhrider:
~the7eventhrider Mar 26, 2009, 8:19:15 AM
There are few pieces of poetry that have spoken to me more strongly than this. The last part resonated with me, and the last time I can remember that happening is when I was reading T.S. Elliot (so you're in pretty good company!). I can't quite express how amazing this is, and the favorite button won't let me press it more than once, so I'll just let you know that if I could fave it a bazillion times I would. Yep. It's that awesome. :heart:

--
. the happiest sappiests .
xDante and the7eventhrider

+ for my purpose holds
To sail beyond the sunset, and the baths
Of all the western stars, until I die.
:iconsatah:
~Satah Mar 26, 2009, 11:00:35 AM
wow, thank you so much. T. S. Eliot is one of my favourite poets. I'm honoured to be in the same thought (:

thankss! <3

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i wish that the library were open all night, because i like being there.
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~LadyRoa Mar 26, 2009, 1:27:33 PM
i have a donor card with all boxes checked off
and a habit for reckless abandon


That is the part that got me. It is very nonchalant and blunt, but to me it gives off a cryptic meaning. Sort of like a wish under a statement.

As always, your poetry floors me. <3

--
Nothing is foolproof to a sufficiently talented fool.
:iconsatah:
~Satah Mar 26, 2009, 5:43:03 PM
well-read, ma'am. (;

thank youu. <3

--
i wish that the library were open all night, because i like being there.
:iconthe7eventhrider:
~the7eventhrider Mar 26, 2009, 9:29:41 PM
Who wouldn't want to be with him? He's one of my favorites too. ^_^ You are most welcome.

--
. the happiest sappiests .
xDante and the7eventhrider

+ for my purpose holds
To sail beyond the sunset, and the baths
Of all the western stars, until I die.
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