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    If all of my skin were to fall
         to ashes or burst into
      the deepest, reddest flames,
   and my eyes rolled up and I
     lay straight on my back, would you
        put me out or let me sleep?

     If we were side-by-side with our
    eyes toward the ceiling, and my
       lungs emitted
  a coarse death rattle and burrs
     sprung from my bones, severing
        all major veins and snapping every tendon--
                what then?

       What then, if, while sleeping, I extracted
      your pulse, tied it to mine, and
              sewed it back in, making our
        heartbeats into a complicated machine, somehow
    relying on and being fuelled by
          the other?

    If, upon holding your hand, my
        palm opened wide and I
  collapsed to my knees, holding
    my sides together, and my hairline
        dripped steadily with the contents of my
         skull and the masses cried stigmata,
     would you
   stitch me up or
      tell them I'm miraculous?

         And if, in feverish dreams, I
           make breathless love to you for
       the very first time and then
                when I wake up,
         blood pools at my feet--
                                   what then?
©2008-2009 ~Satah
:iconsatah:

Author's Comments

Macabre: gruesome, horrifying, terrible; of or suggestive of the allegorical dance of death

I don't know what this is, but it reads like a nightmare. I guess that's the sort of shit I write when I'm sick.

Like a year ago, for a little while, every day, I picked a new word and memorized its meaning. I don't remember the exact date, but it was a weekend and my word was macabre. That day, I had to go to lunch with my relatives, and it was stuck in my head all through. It really set the mood for the meal (not that it would have been a spectacularly cheerful affair, anyway-- family gatherings never are). Isn't it a beautiful sentence, though? Of, or suggestive of, the allegorical dance of death.

SO WHAT! I'M STILL A ROCKSTAR! I GOT MY ROCK MOVES AND I DON'T NEED YOU!! (lyrics completely unrelated, but playing at the time of submission)

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:iconclepclep:
I like this one, a lot. Idk why I can't be all deep and explain why. ): I just do. really good job.
:iconbenji-man:
Pink is good! On a more macabre note:
I don't know how I got this way
Or if I'll be alright
I'm breaking the habit
Breaking the habit tonight


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What doesn't kill you makes you stranger...
:icontalk2hand:
Lol jesus ew! xD
But I like it a lot O: It really..idk...different. in a good way.
:icontchy:
I really really like the last verse for some reason. Very good imagery throughout.

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You know you're just stalling. You've tumbled.
(You're falling.)
And I know you don't know where to start, but
There's gotta be a reason that "live" and "love"
Are only one letter apart.

*Cariad-Club
:iconsatah:
c: I actually sort of thought you would, and I dunno why either xD but thank-you c:

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconsatah:
She's not bad :B

Oh, dear. Are you relating my poetry to Linkin Park? Maybe I really should cheer up the writing. xP

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconsatah:
xD Knew you'd think it was narsty. But thanks c:

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconsatah:
Thanks o: That was the verse that sparked the whole thing, so... kudos?

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconmarzguy:
Macabre isa right!

The third stanza reaches me as having a tenderness underneath, though.

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"Insert something clever here."

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