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                well, I was just thinking,
               you know that one feeling
             where you care about someone so much
              that you just feel like you're going to crash

                       (like action-movie-holy-shit-explosion-crash)

          and so you wrap your arms around them
             and cling so tightly that it's like your
       muscles are locked in place

                       and you try and think of
                 something to say
                    to get your thoughts across

              (anything, oh god, ANYTHING)

                   but the words won't come
                       which is sort of frustrating because
                         you're supposed to be a fucking poet
                     and expressing thoughts and emotions
                                is supposedly, like, your speciality

                             (and everyone's always all
                             "oh you're so good with words"
                             but I guess they don't know you very well)

         and you start to sink into the blackness of it

              and the only thing holding you to this world
                  is the friction of their sweater on your cheek,
                their scent, their breath, the harsh reality of
                    your pounding head, and
                                        their arms

           and then they hug you back and
            it crosses your mind that, hey, maybe they
                       ... like... feel the same way

                 and your heart swells right up

        and fireworks burst up in your mind

              and your seams start to strain

          and complete joy overwhelms you


                   and fucking everything is right in the world


                   and fucking NOTHING can bring you down



                         not even dying




             which you feel like you're about to do anyway





                       but it wouldn't even matter because you're so happy?











     ... yeah.
           no word is that powerful--
                                                 not even "love".
©2009 ~Satah
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Author's Comments

a re-look at Not Even Love [link] .

this is... hmm. I'm still not happy with it, but I think it's better? I don't even know if I agree with the concept anymore, tbh. words mean a lot more to me now than they did then.

(check it: then AND than in the same sentence.)

mostly, I just think it's interesting to look at how... umm... different my poetry is... compared to april of last year.

related: where the FISH did my capital letters go?

(oh, apparently they went into my confused pseudo-swearing.)

ps: OH GOD PLEASE DON'T GO READ MY OLD WORK I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHY IT'S STILL UP HERE IT'S ALL BAD OH NO OH NOO

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:iconsaasan:
GAHHHH. Your comments are the best. :D Like, for reals. Also--I so understand about the writers-being-good-with-words thing. Sometimes, writers suck at words especially hard 'cause they know better than to call somethings "love."

But I do love you poem. :D

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Also, I love you.
:iconsaasan:
(I just looked at your previous version and yes this is better. So, congrats on improvement! Yay!)

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Also, I love you.
:iconsatah:
aha, thank you :B I just sort of... talk... it's very cool of me... and not dorky at all.

oh boy. that might be it. mostly, I think that I just... write intelligently, but don't think it.

thanks! and for the comment about improvement.

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconimmortalshande:
Oh my. This is so beautiful. *happy sigh*

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"Greater love hath no man than this; that he lay down his life for his friends."
John 15:13

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:iconclepclep:
I like it, it is fab. <3

that you just feel like you're going to crash

(like action-movie-holy-shit-explosion-crash)

the greatestt
:iconcitysilence:
This made me laugh because of the way I could just HEAR it in my head, the voice getting more desperate and quick and emotional and ... it was just fun. :)

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:iconsatah:
thank you (:

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconsatah:
aww thank youu.

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconsatah:
thank youu! I'm thinking of making a short film out of it. do you think it could work as narration?

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconhelenvontroygewicht:
I suck with words, but i so love you'r poems >3< they're full of feelings >__< for me at least n_n

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