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         i am the
        cigarette
            you once held
                  so passionately
               to your lips:

      your hands
         lit me up
       and my ember heart glowed so brightly
             as your breath surged through me,

                    only to
                 burn out and be
                      crushed under the toe
               of your shoe;

           a dirty habit you
               picked up

        too young

              despite the numerous warnings
                 my outside gave you.

                       i told you that i'd
                     probably kill you
                         and you ignored me
                           to get to know my insides
                   a little better.



         now i am a
           charred, mangled filter,

          crushed into the pavement, and

                while you've
                    fished the next one
             out of your pack,

                      i
                         still have
              your lip prints

                            staining my skin.
©2009 ~Satah
:iconsatah:

Author's Comments

you are on the wrong end of this metaphor:

i always need you in my blood

i come alive when my lips are on you

your perfume has settled into my hair and clothes

the best way to take you in is on long walks late at night

i love you but you're hurting me.

i'll be out of your life as soon as you chew some gum.

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:iconmoon-and-ash:
Gorgeous, harrowing, (hell, sensual!) use of the metaphor with darkly clever twists.
:iconeternalsolaceessence:
PERFECT!!!! I LOVE THE METAPHORS AND THE WORDS. DEEP.

--
I'm breaking and you could care less
I'm breaking and you just stare at the pieces falling
It's all your fault
Yes, yes, that I'm breaking
Breaking
Breaking
Broken
:iconpaperheartsyndrome:
oh whoa, this metaphor is amazing.
and every word is just beyond perfect.
i love it [it sort of leaves a bitter taste in your mouth which i think is brilliant for what this piece is. you amaze me :heart:]
:iconchaplainmars:
Whoa, well done =D

Strange metaphor oO

--
"To dream; first we must suffer."

"...and when you get there, tell Satan who sent you."
:iconalecbell:
Some people have strong views about fags?

(but that might only work in English slag, where suprisingly a fag can also be a cigarette.)

This is vintage Satah, no other brand will do :heart:

--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.

Words create situations [link]

The roots of the future run deep [link]
:iconcrookd-bullet:
Amazing interpretation! Dark&awesome I'm in awe. :+favlove:

--
She has no heart but she dreams in old fashioned ways. - K.W.
:iconclepclep:
what a sick romance. <3
:icondistortified:
Fuckin' glorious, Cap'n. You fill me with an envy at times that I could not begin to express.

--
"Final Draft = Rough Draft - 20%" - Stephen King
:iconsaasan:
Wowza. What a perfect metaphor. I must now slightly hate you for your brilliance.

Slightly.

--
Obligatory message here!:

Also, I love you.

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