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I'm pregnant or I'm broken.
I'm doubled or I'm halved.
My mind's all in confusion
and I'm trying not to laugh.

I just know my breasts are achin'
and my stomach's crying loud.
Sure, I'll tell you my life story,
but god knows I'm not proud.

The bleeding never stops.
No tourniquet or stitches.
The bleeding never stops.
It just comes and goes in twitches.

I wake up.
I wake up.
I wake up.
I'm still young.

When you have trust in no-one,
and no-one trusts in you,
the colour of your dreaming
is a dark and sullied blue.

The bleeding never stops.
It hits, but never bruises.
The bleeding never stops.
It doesn't take excuses.

When you think you have a voice
and you think you have a choice,
that's when you realize you're out of time.

The bleeding never stops.
©2008-2009 ~Satah
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Author's Comments

This poem makes me uncomfortable! C: Not necessarily because of the content or anything, just... a feeling I get from it. Hanyways.

Yeah, it's about growing up.

Yeah!

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:iconmarzguy:
A mature work from such a young lady.

There are some great lines in this one.

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Have you ever experienced deja vous?

Don’t make me ask you twice.
:iconcitysilence:
This is the uncomfortable poem!
I don't get uncomfortable. xD

My favourite part =
"When you have trust in no-one,
and no-one trusts in you,
the colour of your dreaming
is a dark and sullied blue."

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Alice came to a fork in the road.
"Which road do I take?" she asked.
"Where do you want to go?" responded the Cheshire cat.
"I don't know," Alice answered.
Then said the cat, "It doesn't matter."
:iconsatah:
This isn't the uncomfortable poem xD This is another poem, which also happens to make me uncomfortable!

Thank-you.

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconsatah:
Thank-you. <3

By the way, I love your new signature. P:

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconblack-doggie:
I know what you mean by the weird feeling. It was like ... shoot... I can't ever describe any thing. I thought it was sort of hair raising in a strange kind of ackwardly creepy way... I don't know. Any way I love the two stanzs after I'm still young thing.

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Suffragette city!
<3 David
:iconsatah:
Heh xP Thank-you.

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Wowza! How awesomesupremo! That\'s just so ulticooliolicious!
:iconsingingsorrow:
I like the parts about bleeding. :D

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Nobody reads these, do they?
:iconfrazzled-mage:
Satah~ I adore the first stanza, the overall piece is strong, but that stanza is lovely with its paradoxes...:clap:

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please stop by sometime :gallery:

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youarerighthereyouhavetakenthespaceoutofmywords
:icontchy:
This makes me uncomfortable too but for some reason it's uncomfortable in a good way.

I do not know why. I cannot explain. But it's a nice poem. xD

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You know you're just stalling. You've tumbled.
(You're falling.)
And I know you don't know where to start, but
There's gotta be a reason that "live" and "love"
Are only one letter apart.

*Cariad-Club

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